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PostSubject: Gengkiskan: The Rise of Greatness   Sun Jan 22, 2012 2:28 am

How did you guys think that comes out? I'm not really experience in writing stories, so if it's a little rough and there are grammatical mistakes, pardon me. I hope that at least you guys will enjoy reading it! flower

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PostSubject: Re: Gengkiskan: The Rise of Greatness   Tue Jan 24, 2012 5:03 pm

I like it so far.
Only thing needs fixin' is that it needs more explosions and death.
...But you know, that is just from my point of view.

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PostSubject: Re: Gengkiskan: The Rise of Greatness   Wed Jan 25, 2012 7:24 am

The first half of the story will be quite grim and My-life-is-really-really-terrible kind of thing, later in the story I will try to include some light-hear ted stuffs when Gengkiskan's life gets better and more happy. (I really like to write about jokes and light feeling stuffs more than drama now anyway) But I may not be able to update my story in a long time because.
1. I'm lazy
2. Just studying at school, doing homework, then playing DF, eating dinner, already takes 90% of my time, after that I watch a bit of TV show then go to sleep. (I sleep at 9:30)

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PostSubject: Re: Gengkiskan: The Rise of Greatness   Wed Jan 25, 2012 1:28 pm

Quote :
1. I'm lazy

I hear that... /isalsolazy
Take your time, though, I can wait. Very Happy

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PostSubject: Re: Gengkiskan: The Rise of Greatness   Thu Jan 26, 2012 7:37 am

Thx, Gavon! I'll try to take my time and try to made the best story that I can! cheers

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PostSubject: Re: Gengkiskan: The Rise of Greatness   Thu Feb 02, 2012 1:29 am

Laziness FT - ah who cares



and seems like you're going the opposite of my story, mine starts out good, and just gets worse. I try to make it less depressing with humor throughout the whole thing though...awesome part about the narrator.

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PostSubject: Re: Gengkiskan: The Rise of Greatness   Thu Feb 02, 2012 9:13 pm

Yeah, real opposite, mine goes from a life full of sadness and hatred to a life of happiness and friends later. santa I still wants to have happy ending in the story.

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PostSubject: Re: Gengkiskan: The Rise of Greatness   Fri Feb 03, 2012 1:40 pm

ya, I like my stories to be somewhat tragic, yet still have the character not so depressing to read about. for example :

SPOILER ALERT :

I plan to have sable destroy his home town by accident and go insane in MH chroniles

END OF SPOILER

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PostSubject: Re: Gengkiskan: The Rise of Greatness   Fri Feb 03, 2012 9:02 pm

Scarrryyy... Now I know the whole plot of my story, but still quite lazy to write it as that it's very very long.

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PostSubject: Re: Gengkiskan: The Rise of Greatness   Sun Feb 05, 2012 5:15 am

same here for MH chronicles.

My stories WILL end happy for the people though, but you know they'll never be as happy as they COULD have been.

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PostSubject: Re: Gengkiskan: The Rise of Greatness   Sat Apr 07, 2012 4:01 am

I've just added a new chapter to my story! (Takes a long time enough, eventhough it's just one chapter) Gloomy seasons, FTW! santa

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PostSubject: Re: Gengkiskan: The Rise of Greatness   Sat Apr 07, 2012 11:23 am

Yay! New chapter!
*scurries off to the Library*

EDIT:
Okay, Gengkiskan, I've figured out what your pianissimo is.
Linking verbs.
You get your 'were's and 'was's'z'z mixed up. I think, to better your writing and speech, you should do a little studying on Linking Verbs.
Besides that, however, this chapter was... I can't even think of the word to describe it!
It was sad, and... The only word that comes to mind is agonizing. It was awesome!
I do, however, feel that you could have done so much more with it, though. You should be more descriptive in your writing. Describe how the flames crackled, how the bandits cackled, how the scene moved.
Writing isn't just a long line of words, it is a picture. It is art, and if I can't picture the scene in my mind, and really feel what is going on, then you aren't really writing. You're just... laying down a long line of nothing.
Get what I'm saying?
Now that that is out of the way, I demand more chapters! You've left me hanging with an awesome chapter, and you aren't just going to wait a month to write another one, like you did last time.
You've got fans, now.

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PostSubject: Re: Gengkiskan: The Rise of Greatness   Sat Apr 07, 2012 1:02 pm

agreed, and while I admit I didnt go as descriptive as usual with my last chapter I usually try to. we have to see the image in our minds to get the full effect. Theres a saying for this "Don't tell me the moon was full, show the glint of light off the broken glass"



Other than that what really limits you is that English is not your first language, so grammar can be a little off. (don't feel bad, ppl screw grammar up even if it IS their first language) So just get that up and youve got quite the story starting

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PostSubject: Re: Gengkiskan: The Rise of Greatness   Tue Apr 10, 2012 5:46 am

^Thx a lot Gavon and Dart! I'll try my best to improve my grammar and descriptive writing. And luckily, now is my 10 day holiday in my country, so maybe I could write some more chapters. cyclops

EDIT: Added three new chapters today, enjoy reading! cheers

EDIT: Added the last chapter during my holiday period! And say guys, between cyan, blue, and dark blue, which do you prefer more to be the color of kathool's text?

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PostSubject: Re: Gengkiskan: The Rise of Greatness   Wed Jun 15, 2016 12:24 am

Newly revised and completed version of my story is here! Changed names from Rise of Grestness to Crashing Tides, and change the protagonist's name to Adrian Khan. I remove details relating to DF so readers who didn't play the game could understand it too. Not sure if anyone is still looking at this but, any way, enjoy!  santa
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PostSubject: Re: Gengkiskan: The Rise of Greatness   Wed Jun 29, 2016 10:48 am

Good work Gengkiskan. I really enjoyed to read your work. It was short storry but filled with  emotions,drama and some action. Keep up your good work.  Very Happy
I hope this will not be the last storry we see from you.
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PostSubject: Re: Gengkiskan: The Rise of Greatness   Thu Jun 30, 2016 6:19 am

Thank you so much Tigi! Currently I am writing up some fantasy short stories, will be posting them on here once they are finished! Very Happy

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